before moving on to the next phase....

Congratulations for today's presentation!


Below are personal comments - follow them to improve your work before Tuesday and post your entire presentation + text on the blog:


GUIDE
- correct the spelling (of many words!) on your plates, especially Freank and HEARTH (unless that one was intentional, in that case rather beautiful!)
- improve your perspective renderings
- label your drawings (you can also improve them according to all comments made today)
- finish the site on your model (it could be selected for end of year exhibition)


YIPTA
- finish your model with details
- improve your perspective renderings, create a real sequence and locate the view points on the plan


KONG
- correct all mistakes in model and drawings
- built a detail model of the glass panels to show your understanding
- perspective rendering in relation to the entrance sequence &/or the sun path of a day in the house


NOTT 
(- great work!)
- change the font of your introduction panel!!!
- show your diagrams in a better way
- improve your model and drawings according to all comments made today


PLOY
- finish everything you started!!
- make a much better (and twice as big) detailed model of the house
- to discover how time could be managed (in a creative way), read Thinking Course by Edward de Bono (i know the title is frightening but this is actually a fantastic book)


CAKE
- rework on all your drawings and make them consistent to each other! use line-weights, look for the basic rules of technical drawings (you should really know about that by now)
- rework on your model and be extremely delicate with the craft
- site plan missing


NICK
- introduction plate missing
- put titles on your plates and label your drawings
- perspective renderings missing
- improve the model!
- improve the axo


BOM
- fix your model!! (and invent something to replace the fluorescent green carpet, make a forest, in accordance to the site - this model could be selected for exhibition)
- improve your drawings according to all comments made this afternoon


ARM
- i recommend you to read Edward Tufte's books to improve your diagrams (and in general)
- improve your perspective renderings


BO
- key to the drawings! what are the numbers referring to?
- fix the scale of your drawings! (check all of them, they should correspond)
- improve the renderings (coherent furniture etc. you can use the photographs you found as well, photoshop)


NUNG
- make the plan a vertical orthographic projection and the axo a parallel projection!!
- complete the model or make a new one, with site and more detail